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  • Man of War – Excerpt No. 150

    For reasons that were not entirely clear to him, the ambient noise level had dropped significantly. In his mind he heard blood flowing through his veins but that was likely due to his rising blood pressure. I better get an answer soon…

    “She’s the beauty who always makes sure to lean over while serving us so you get the full view of what she has to offer,” Cornay replied in a hushed tone.

    Now the tavern was quiet as a tomb. In the distance he caught sight of Beatriz busy picking up a round at the bar. She must have been at least sixty paces away and yet she was looking towards them with a distorted face.

    Marc could have sworn there were two of her. Within the span of a second she appeared to be holding drinks and placing them down onto the bar. He blinked, and she was gone. The door behind the bar slammed shut followed by the sound of hurried footsteps.

    Picture of beautiful woman picking up drinks at a tavern bar. She is staring at a table full of uniformed patrons. Has the look of horror on her face. Clothes and background appropriate for 16th century France.

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  • Man of War – Excerpt No. 149

    However, the name Beatriz meant nothing to him. While it was not uncommon around here for families from both sides of the border intermarry. The name itself implied Spanish roots, but that was hardly telling.

    Adjudant?”

    As his second smiled, Marc felt his ears grow warm. While he could hide much of his emotional state behind a mask, Marc had no control over reactions that were purely instinctual. Knowing that I’m blushing makes this all the more embarrassing.

    Picture of an French army officer in a tavern. Man looks embarassed. Clothes and background appropriate for 16th century France tavern.

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  • Man of War – Excerpt No. 148

    “What do you mean, Adjudant?” Marc asked.

    Unlike some commanders, Marc refused to drop ranks. They worked hard to get where they are and should be recognised for their accomplishment.

    “I’ve seen your marksmanship, mon Lieutenant,” Cornay said. “So obviously, you’re not blind.”

    “Is there a point to this, Adjudant?”

    “Several men claim that you haven’t noticed Beatriz, mon Lieutenant.”Upon hearing the word ‘men’ in that statement, the contents of Marc’s stomach soured. He was all for solidarity, but they should not be so bored as to take an active interest in what he took notice of.

    Picture of a woman of Spanish decent. Tall, well-dressed, busty, dark-brown eyes, dark-brown wavy hair. Holding a tray of drinks, as she works in a tavern. Clothes and background appropriate for 16th century France.

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  • Man of War – Excerpt No. 147

    Mon Lieutenant,” Cornay began. “Is there something wrong?”

    Finally, I might get some answers on what’s on their mind. Marc had to admit this was an example of the lapses in discipline he feared. How they were surrounded by his men, and the overly familiar tone his Adjudant used to address him. Marc liked to maintain the appearance of a rigid separation between the ranks in public. 

    “What do you mean, Adjudant?” Marc asked.

    Unlike some commanders, Marc refused to drop ranks. They worked hard to get where they are and should be recognised for their accomplishment.

    Uniformed men sitting around a large table in a tavern, everyone focused on the officer at the head of the table. Clothes and background appropriate for 16th century France.

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  • Man of War – Excerpt No. 146

    Last, there was Adjudant Cornay, a solid soldier who had been in service of le Roi two years longer than Marc had. The man was approaching his thirties, and his hair was more salt than pepper. He was tall, built and his skin was worn from the weather. He says that’s from his time as a merchant sailor.

    When they first met, Cornay had given him one of those stares. The one that soldiers gave a new officer as they pondered how many grand ideals they needed to be excised from their minds before they could be trusted.

    When he caught Marc’s rigid demeanour, crisp drill, and ability to take command those thoughts were dismissed. They had been cut from the same cloth and even fought in the same conflicts.

    It was Cornay who recommended they integrate with the townspeople. Marc’s soldier side had been tempted to say ‘no’ in the name of discipline, but their practicality paid off in the end.

    Picture of a man in his thirties. Wears a uniform. Has grey in his hair. Tall, well-built, and weathered skin.  Clothes and background appropriate for 16th century France.

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  • Man of War – Excerpt No. 145

    The men ended up in cells for the night, requiring a prisoner watch. That meant there were fewer soldiers in attendance tonight. The additional watches ensured the men did not hurt themselves, or anyone else, until they addressed the situation. The men on duty will learn of what they missed, and ensure no one else spoils their fun ever again.

    Meanwhile, Sergeant Chabanel, with his blond hair and blue eyes, suffered heavy losses in a recent clash with the Spanish. While they were quick with sending them conscripts this time, that meant fresh troops they needed to train and integrate. That puts a strain on everyone else, and my gift to them lets them know I’m aware of their challenges.

    Picture focused on two uniformed men behind bars. Clothes and background appropriate for 16th century France.

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  • Man of War – Excerpt No. 143

    It created challenges for the sergeants to keep the soldiers in line, but there was no better alternative. Sometimes the decisions he made, like frequenting a local tavern with his men, fell into a grey area, but soldiers needed more than discipline.

    A young and busty brunette came along with a fresh bottle of wine. As was the custom, he took the first sip before deciding whether to accept or reject the bottle. Tonight he noted several peculiar stares from the rank and file. Not exactly making me feel at ease…

    Merci, that will do,” Marc said. “Please leave the bottle.”

    Men in uniform in a tavern, with an officer at the head of the table. There is a busty black haired server leaning down to show her cleavage. Clothes and background appropriate for 16th century France.

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  • Man of War – Excerpt No. 142

    Six months later, at the tender age of twenty-one, Marc was in a tavern with his senior staff. By now, he should have had a subordinate officer, but the promise of men and equipment seldomly materialised. Instead we are told to make due

    The fortification that housed his garrison was built for a force the quarter of their size. To accommodate the men, those not on duty were free to go into town, since the kitchen was inadequate for their numbers. The garrison interacting with the locals helped relations immensely. They actually look forward to our return

    Picture of a small Spanish fort, filled with soldiers conducting drill. Clothes and background appropriate for 16th century France.

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  • Man of War – Excerpt No. 141

    “You’ll need this,” Bertrand said before tossing him a golden object.

    When Marc caught it in mid-air, he discovered it was his Father’s signet ring. In actuality it belonged to him, but the transition was too new to adjust in terminology.

    He slipped it on and found that it fit his pinky finger perfectly. Marc smiled at his mentor for remembering the one thing that would identify his authority. Father must be rolling on his grave right nowor over a spit in Hell

    “I see I made the right choice!” Marc said before marching smartly towards the stables.

    Picture of a signet ring with a royal seal visible. Clothes and background appropriate for 16th century France.

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  • Man of War – Excerpt No. 140

    “I’ll do my best,” Bertrand said. 

    Given time, the full weight of the responsibilities given to Bertrand would make themselves felt. However, Marc would not be here to see for himself as he had to get ready to leave. At least I’m already packed.

    “You’ll make a fine Steward,” Marc said. “You have the heart to help our people, and I have the courage to keep the enemy at bay… I must go.”

    Marc was about to kick off towards the stable, when he caught the sound of Bertrand clearing his throat. That had often how he reminded his students they forgot something. What did I forget?

    Guard clearing his throat as a soldier heads off to the stables. Background and scene appropriate to 16th century France.

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